Evidence in writing is needed to support an argument or a standpoint, otherwise why should the reader believe it? In my final draft of “How to Succeed as a Physician,” I used examples from medical comics to support my claim that professional should use empathy when treating patients. More specifically, I claimed in one of my body paragraphs that “Physicians need to become experts not only of the information in the medical field, but also experts in empathizing with patients.” That is an arguable claim which some may argue that doctors only need to be able to perform their job. But I followed up my claim with evidence from a comic in “The Crayon Revolution” that showed my audience that empathy is apart of the job, and actually makes the job more effective. In using the evidence, I chose to paraphrase the comic, rather than summarizing the whole thing. I quoted only a few words, “old person whisperer,” because they best phrased what the character in the comic was. Because the character in the comic became more successful at her job through the use of empathy, my analysis of the evidence connects her success with how people in medical professions can be more successful by using empathy. By including this evidence from an outside source, my claim actually has meaning and can be more trustful.

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